Reviews For Minor Third

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Reviewer: gwasshoppa (Anonymous)
30 May 2007 04:50 am

I like how descriptive you've written this. Her feelings are genuinely palpable and easy to understand. Great work.

Reviewer: Mardahin (Signed)
27 May 2007 07:53 am

Wonderful. No one ever thinks about Calleigh falling apart; she's an integral part of the lab dynamic and support structure. However, she's human, and there comes a time when even the hardiest souls are pushed beyond their breaking point. A beautiful depiction of that, in an attractively sparing style.

Reviewer: Sunhawk (Anonymous)
25 May 2007 03:58 am

This was an interesting attempt to showcase Calleigh's fears from the past season :) Just noticed a few things, hope you don't mind me pointing them out ^_^

The pretension was killing her

I think you would be better of using the word "pretense" here because pretension is closer to pretentious

she felt like she was releasing in notches

I found the notches reference to be a bit awkward, I would have said something like "steps" because notches are usually used to mark progress itself rather than indicate a quantitative amount of progress, such as small, even amounts.

She almost got sleeping aides

sleeping aids :)